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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Jun 10, 2010 19:38:09 GMT -5
... I didn't personify myself in that character, nor will my whole story be devoted to him. And all he did was interact with a nameless village... I know.
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Post by J.O.N ((Dragonwing)) on Jun 11, 2010 2:02:59 GMT -5
I curse Zovo and his slowness to replying back to me about my character. Your story makes me want to work on mine! I'm having a hard figuring out the best way to tell you I'm not fond of the idea. It's not a bad idea, but it just doesn't seem like it's going to work here. It's too. . . expansive, I think is the right word. Too big. See, and I tried to explain this to Reffy as well, Kaez's character is a bit of an exception which is why I've allowed him to kind of run with it. I've already pretty much done what I had intended to do with his character, he's scenery. He wrote me a PM asking if he could write a story explaining in detail how he became scenery. He sent me a detailed explanation of what I had in mind and asked if there were any lore problems. I explained to him what he needed to know, and he reworked whatever needed to be reworked. Thankfully, he and I were pretty close to being on the same page from the beginning, so "The Grove" is coming out really nicely. For everyone else, though, I haven't even written you into the story yet; and allowing you to create your own character's (as manifestations of yourselves) and their cooresponding backstory basicly puts constraints around what I can eventually do with you. I'd rather you wrote stories about people who are not you, interacting with people who are not anyone else. At least until i can decide how I want to cast you in the story. Does that make sense? Writing your own character before I do, is kind of like walking into my game and stealing the ball. For instance, Sensar could write a story about his character, because it's pretty unlikely I'll be bringing him back for any reason. This isn't aimed at you specifically, Dragon, there are a few people to whom this is directed. Oh I don't mind if you if you don't want us writing in. I'm more impatient on seeing how my character turns out in story, and also, I don't mind how it turns out, I would just be happy to mentioned .
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Post by ARSmith ((Wolfeh)) on Jun 16, 2010 15:20:14 GMT -5
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What Dragon said. :] It's a wonderful read.
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Post by Lilam on Jun 18, 2010 20:11:07 GMT -5
Finally managed to read through all of The Grove. I enjoyed it. ^_^ It was well written, descriptive and I definitely felt immersed in the story. The details (especially when he went into the Dark) were very vivid without becoming purpley or excessive, which I must applaud you for accomplishing that. I give it two gnomish thumbs up! Nothing much left to say but keep up the top notch work and write faster pweeze.
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Post by Kaez on Jun 18, 2010 21:10:38 GMT -5
Finally managed to read through all of The Grove. I enjoyed it. ^_^ It was well written, descriptive and I definitely felt immersed in the story. The details (especially when he went into the Dark) were very vivid without becoming purpley or excessive, which I must applaud you for accomplishing that. I give it two gnomish thumbs up! Nothing much left to say but keep up the top notch work and write faster pweeze. Aw, thanks, Lilam! I'm writing it on a sort of "when-the-inspiration-strikes-me" basis, as Zovo hasn't really given me any sort of time limit (thankfully!) and it's nearly halfway written as it is. Given my recent re-addiction to Xbox... it might be a while for the next update, but that's okay! ... Right? ... Right?! >.>
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Post by tamwyn on Jun 18, 2010 21:15:49 GMT -5
Don't do it, Kaez. As soon as you take a break, it'll be harder and harder to come back to the story. I know that's how it is with me and Gears of War! Don't give in to the Dark Side! They don't really have cookies!
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Post by tamwyn on Jun 18, 2010 21:59:31 GMT -5
Well he is a busy guy with a lot on his plate. I'd be patient and let him tell you before you jump to conclusions. And I mean that in the politest way possible, Waldy.
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Post by The Drall on Jun 18, 2010 22:20:49 GMT -5
I'm just going to go on a limb here and say Zovo didn't like my piece. Or, like he said, he's wondering how to fit into his world. This is his project, dude.
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Post by Kaez on Jun 18, 2010 22:58:50 GMT -5
Don't do it, Kaez. As soon as you take a break, it'll be harder and harder to come back to the story. I know that's how it is with me and Gears of War! Don't give in to the Dark Side! They don't really have cookies! Actually, I don't expect that to be the case with this one. While it normally is, I organized the outline for this story in a -very- casual way. One that appeals to me as a writing project, and doesn't really require any specific mindset. Coming back to this will be easy -- I suspect I'll probably write a chapter later this week.
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Jun 18, 2010 23:49:37 GMT -5
I'm just going to go on a limb here and say Zovo didn't like my piece. I told you what I thought of it and you responded with, "Well I might have been angry when I wrote that." To me that says, "I'm not really proud of what I wrote and could easily do better; I'll give you something new after I spend some more time with it."
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Jun 19, 2010 0:20:42 GMT -5
Hmmmm. . . As suppose that warrants me taking a second look and providing a more thorough critique. Look for it the next few days.
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Post by Faerd ((B'slash)) on Jun 25, 2010 0:11:47 GMT -5
Just read through all of this, and I must say, I love the idea behind it, the thoroughness of the work, and, well I suppose I quite like everything about it.
Is this still going on? And is it possible for me to try and create a character to put within this?
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Jun 25, 2010 14:41:37 GMT -5
Just read through all of this, and I must say, I love the idea behind it, the thoroughness of the work, and, well I suppose I quite like everything about it. Is this still going on? And is it possible for me to try and create a character to put within this? It is still going on, I haven't abandoned it. I really like some of the ideas I've come up with and want to play with them, and I want to open them up to you guys as well. Any ideas you have, feel free to shoot them over to me via PM (if you're planning a story), or just ask here if they are just little details you're curious about. Like I said, I want this to be a world of stories, not a world of characters and places; so just let me know what you've got on your mind and we'll work with it.
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Post by tamwyn on Jun 25, 2010 23:30:02 GMT -5
Episode I: “Though his fingers were spread wide and open, his hangs were nearly vibrating with tension.” “hangs” should be “hands”, I think. Awesome so far, I’m really getting into this story! Episode II: My reactions to this story thus far: OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG I LOVE IT! This has got to be the best thing I ever read from you. No mistakes that I could see at this point. Episode III: “A bright, white, sun-like luminescence penetrate the grass all around the small seed, vibrations fading further with each explosion of light” “Penetrate” should be “penetrated”. Wow, Kaez. Wow. I WANT MORE, NAOW! But seriously, that was extremely, extremely good. The descriptions, the dialogue…they really feel professional and something I’d read in a book. God, I’m jealous. It’s easy to relate you to a powerful, immortal individual and you writing as one seems almost natural. Only a few grammatical mistakes here and there, the ones I’ve listed, but otherwise…I have no complaints. In fact, I want to see more, just to partake in the way your mind works. The way you have with words far exceeds my own and I just am so...it feels like I’m buoyant in a pool, relaxed and happy. Excellent. Truly excellent.
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Post by Kaez on Jun 26, 2010 0:19:56 GMT -5
Tam, you flatter me, good sir. I very much appreciate you reading, and I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Hoping to get the next part out this weekend -- possibly today.
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