|
|
Post by Kaez on Mar 24, 2011 15:29:35 GMT -5
I wrote these both last night in long hand on a piece of notebook paper at about 3am. 30.
i drink canned tea
and sit by a tree in the yard of a stranger
watching the exaggerated drunkenness
of a dozen teenage girls
and the woefully understated perversity
of two dozen twenty-something men
tonight i will kill you with my bare hands
in a fury of sobriety and bloodlust
god help me
youre going to have a problem that only hospitals can solve
good fucking lord
im not even kidding youre going to be bleeding really badly
31.
wheres your mom by the way
she died a couple weeks ago
oh im sorry to hear that
thats okay you didnt know
also your neighbors arent speaking english
i think theyre some sort of slavic
i didnt know there were black people in slovakia
thats what i said
i think she just said 'cinnabon death metal'
no yeah i heard it too
|
|
|
|
Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Mar 26, 2011 13:30:41 GMT -5
30 - too excessively violent for me to enjoy. (Unless I missed the point. Shrug.)
31 - definitely intrigued and still thinking about it. Grats.
I liked your lines. Some real nuggets of gold in there :]
|
|
|
|
Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Mar 26, 2011 13:42:30 GMT -5
I like little one line sentences which seem to say way more than they say. In fact, I chucked a little short bit up in my thread the other day. Glad to see I'm not the only one who finds depth in the shallow end.
|
|
|
|
Post by Kaez on Mar 26, 2011 17:40:32 GMT -5
30 - too excessively violent for me to enjoy. (Unless I missed the point. Shrug.) 31 - definitely intrigued and still thinking about it. Grats. I liked your lines. Some real nuggets of gold in there :] Thanks, Ref. As for 30... it's violent in the least serious possible way. 31... don't over-think it. That's my advice. Thanks again. :] I like little one line sentences which seem to say way more than they say. In fact, I chucked a little short bit up in my thread the other day. Glad to see I'm not the only one who finds depth in the shallow end. Yeah, there's something interesting about this sort of minimalism that's been appealing to me lately. I feel like I'm still far from mastering the art of it, and that I'll probably do quite a bit in the future. |
|
|
|
Post by James on Mar 28, 2011 0:25:23 GMT -5
I don't like reading your work anymore, Pete. Because I have a moment of frustration at not having written the line I just read.
Fuck you and your excellent work.
|
|
|
|
Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Mar 31, 2011 4:30:48 GMT -5
aw man that thing really tied the whole room together too Big Lebowski! ;D |
|
|
|
Post by Kaez on Mar 31, 2011 15:13:50 GMT -5
An old poem that was discovered sometime this day.
oh i am bickering
and talking of things
that matter not
to any of you
and i am a little thing.
be great, things
be great and tall
and older and wiser
and bigger and stronger
than i could be.
i speak gibberish hymns
speaking truer names
of nameless things
that come across me
in the dark.
be great, things
see many years
and know many secrets
and be good
and always be good.
we whisper together
sweet words
to capture fleeting things
rumbling deeply
in our breasts.
be great, things
forgive our ways
be gentle when you can
and be stubborn
and dont give up on us.
great speeches
broadcast over
fragile wires
powerful words
spoken by little things.
be great, things
be humble
and sacrifice
and give what you can
and take what you need.
be great, great things.
|
|
|
|
Post by athelstan on Apr 1, 2011 18:29:35 GMT -5
wait are there such things as "mafia dinners"
lots of italian foods probably
i think that might be "racially insensitive", man
lololol |
|
|
|
Post by Sekot on Apr 1, 2011 19:21:04 GMT -5
help i cant dance teach me how to move[/blockquote] [/quote] This is a sad collection of words. |
|
|
|
Post by Kaez on Jul 11, 2011 8:35:08 GMT -5
|
|
|
|
Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Jul 11, 2011 14:34:42 GMT -5
you lied to me
|
|
|
|
Post by Kaez on Jul 11, 2011 15:01:19 GMT -5
|
|
|
|
Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Jul 11, 2011 15:13:15 GMT -5
You changed your avatar. . . you said you'd never do that. . .
|
|
|
|
Post by Kaez on Jul 11, 2011 15:35:00 GMT -5
You changed your avatar. . . you said you'd never do that. . . I've truly sinned the greatest sin of all. |
|
|
|
Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Jul 11, 2011 15:41:08 GMT -5
agreed
|
|
