My short poems (for when the urge hits me)

[Kaez]

"Squish" is weird here. Squish is a lighthearted word to me. It's a funny word. Squishy things are funny.

But the rest of the poem seems... heavy; serious. I'd replace "squish" with something a little tougher.

[Dylaria]

A fair point, you do hear the word "squish" more often lightly than in any attempt of seriousness. Though to be fair, it was far from one of my best efforts on the whole. Trying to fit into the five senses was a bitch.

Oh well, I guess branching out just isn't my thing.