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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Oct 4, 2013 15:01:37 GMT -5
Also, once the reviews have been posted (and they have) all the rest of you are welcome to post questions and comments in the competition thread. I'd like for this competition to foster a little more discussion and discourse than others. Mine is the only opinion that counts but I'd like to hear feedback from others both on the stories and the reviews.
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Post by Kaez on Oct 4, 2013 16:26:10 GMT -5
Totally agree. I think if I had time to revise I would have done that. I'm honestly surprised there aren't more errors because I threw this together really quick while getting ready for dinner with the in-laws and in between diaper changes, lost socks, etc. My life is so glamorous. The other thing that was funny about that part was that initially I was just going to do like one or two sentences to say "this is happening" but I'm trying to force myself to "show" what's happening more instead of "telling." I'm mainly focusing so hard on that aspect right now because while working on my novel I'm trying not to do things like "xxx is really fucked up" and instead do things like describe the actions of xxx and let the reader surmise that he's really fucked up. It's taking some getting used to as far as balance but I'm learning. That's why stuff like this helps even if I don't have time. I get to focus on something small and work on an aspect of my writing that I'm trying to improve overall. I think sometimes AWR members forget how helpful they are to each other. Just the act of pointing out something in another person's work (like if James says something about Injin's story, etc) makes me think about that writing point more and work to improve it. Same with reading other people's stories. Sometimes a really good word falls out of use and then someone uses it in a story or uses it in an unexpected way and brings that word back to the front of my mind. It's like finding a rogue strawberry plant in your garden. You planted strawberries a few seasons ago but not this year. All of sudden one pops up and you're reminded how much you like strawberries. This made me really happy.
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Allya
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My Little Monster!
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Post by Allya on Oct 4, 2013 18:43:04 GMT -5
Shit,I can't see the picture again and I don't remember what it was.
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Oct 4, 2013 18:59:00 GMT -5
Shit,I can't see the picture again and I don't remember what it was. God dammit! I just linked it to my photobucket account so everyone could see it and somehow that made it worse?
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Oct 4, 2013 19:00:39 GMT -5
Try it now.
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Allya
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Post by Allya on Oct 4, 2013 19:41:39 GMT -5
Working!
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Oct 4, 2013 19:54:54 GMT -5
Yay! I'm semi-competent!
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Allya
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Post by Allya on Oct 4, 2013 21:15:16 GMT -5
Done! This ought to be different.
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Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Oct 5, 2013 11:25:17 GMT -5
Love it, Allya. Really great story and provoked a little smile at the end. You captured the struggle really well and the repetition, I felt, made it really poignant.
Adversely it also made me fancy writing a CreepyPasta because of the style.
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Oct 7, 2013 20:12:48 GMT -5
I still owe you guys scores... they're coming.
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Allya
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Post by Allya on Oct 10, 2013 14:45:24 GMT -5
Reffy I read your story today and it was great I can see where you got your inspiration from the picture and loved how you spun it a bit. Also, CreepyPasta?
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Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Oct 15, 2013 2:01:26 GMT -5
Reffy I read your story today and it was great I can see where you got your inspiration from the picture and loved how you spun it a bit. Also, CreepyPasta? Thanks, Allya! I was going to have her attacked on the railway lines after all the lovey stuff but realised I was having more fun describing the lovey stuff. So, yeah. The base is attacked after my story. Also, www.creepypasta.com/ <3 CreepyPasta. Read the one about the Russian Sleep Experiment recently. All the chills!
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Oct 15, 2013 13:50:04 GMT -5
Scores are up for Round One (sorry that took so long). Will try to get reviews up for Round Two today, and final scores on Friday.
If anyone still wants to submit, the Deadline isn't until Friday.
Holy shit, I lost a whole week! Where is my time going?
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Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Oct 16, 2013 2:13:34 GMT -5
Tell me about it, Z. My holiday went zoom and now back to work. Also, YAY round three ;D
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Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Oct 16, 2013 5:13:02 GMT -5
Already got my idea! This is going to be delicious to write
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