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Post by J.O.N ((Dragonwing)) on Oct 9, 2010 0:38:46 GMT -5
Yeah, that was pretty awesome. Needs a swelling dissonance chord and a sound. Maybe I'll pull out a keyboard and record something. And then figure out how to get it to you somehow. The internet is good at that.
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Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Oct 9, 2010 6:07:58 GMT -5
Ooooo that is very clever, Taed! I liked the blue and the way the screen shook :] Definitely needs some kind of crazy sound to it. (Go go Sensar! <3)
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Post by Deleted on Oct 9, 2010 12:24:27 GMT -5
All right, I wanted to practice a shattering text effect, and I needed absolutely any text to try it with. So here is the thematically incongruous A World Removed logo: www.youtube.com/watch?v=9imfCC6jPnwDag, yo! You got skillz! With a z!
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Post by tamwyn on Nov 5, 2010 8:00:40 GMT -5
@kaez: So you're not going to finish writing the story....for what reason? I'm grateful for the outline, but isn't the whole point of the coming revival to introduce -more- stories? Seems kind of counterproductive, regardless of how you think we view you as a role model or not. ASGetty ((Zovo)): I just read the first chapter/prologue thing in A World Removed. That was an intense sense experience; I think you did extremely well for what you were going for. I'm at a loss for words, at the moment I write this, so I'll just reiterate and say well done, Zovo. Though, I am confused on how big this piece of shrapnel is and it's exact location. If its large, there's a good change it severed an artery, which makes it weird that she's able to move as much as she has. But, I'm confident you have a reasonable explanation in your mind and you just couldn't describe it in this kind of piece. One more thing. In the first sentence, you put "an" instead of "and".
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Post by Kaez on Nov 5, 2010 11:25:59 GMT -5
@kaez: So you're not going to finish writing the story....for what reason? I'm grateful for the outline, but isn't the whole point of the coming revival to introduce -more- stories? Seems kind of counterproductive, regardless of how you think we view you as a role model or not. It has nothing to do with the 'coming revival'. I wrote the story -months- ago. I no longer have any interest in actually writing the rest of it, and that's not going to change. So I figured, rather then let it just sit there and collect dust, might as well at least show people where it was going.
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Post by tamwyn on Nov 5, 2010 12:21:18 GMT -5
You have a short attention span, don't you? Really wish you'd finish it. I liked reading it.
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Post by Kaez on Nov 5, 2010 13:07:02 GMT -5
You have a short attention span, don't you? Really wish you'd finish it. I liked reading it. A) I did write 50,000 words in 20 days. B) Yeah. I just took too long of a break from it. I no longer have the feel for the characters or the setting. And I've got a -lot- of writing on my plate for the future. I just don't have the interest or the time to finish this one, even if I might've liked to.
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Nov 5, 2010 17:17:49 GMT -5
. . . That -is- strange, isn't it. . . And I'm sure that's subject to change once I get things rolling here. Surely reading more about the world itself could inspire you to finish this up.
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Post by Kaez on Nov 5, 2010 17:28:16 GMT -5
. . . That -is- strange, isn't it. . . And I'm sure that's subject to change once I get things rolling here. Surely reading more about the world itself could inspire you to finish this up. If you were ever to do that... yes, yes, it would.
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Nov 5, 2010 17:38:38 GMT -5
. . . That -is- strange, isn't it. . . And I'm sure that's subject to change once I get things rolling here. Surely reading more about the world itself could inspire you to finish this up. If you were ever to do that... yes, yes, it would. I'm gonna try to put some time in on it this weekend. I had some good ideas I want to capitalize on before I forget them.
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Nov 8, 2010 18:45:49 GMT -5
So, uh, if you're even vaguely considering writing about my character, I'd like to change my responses to reflect mindless, unreasonable, wanton, sociopathic murder. And harems. No, five harems. And have him be suicidal. For obvious reasons. And be luckless with love. . . because that makes him all the more hateable, don't it? Gives you a nice, comedic antagonist. In actuality, your character would best be described as "pitiful if he weren't so dislikable."
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Post by o ding on Nov 8, 2010 18:54:08 GMT -5
In actuality, your character would best be described as "pitiful if he weren't so dislikable." That's what I had in mind for my original answers too, actually. He has a kingdom to run, and plenty of new responsibilites, but he'd rather be out chasing girls. But if he were more sociopathic. . . well, that would just exaggerate that idea a bit more. Right; that's exactly what you're like.
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Nov 8, 2010 18:58:10 GMT -5
In actuality, your character would best be described as "pitiful if he weren't so dislikable." That's what I had in mind for my original answers too, actually. He has a kingdom to run, and plenty of new responsibilites, but he'd rather be out chasing girls. But if he were more sociopathic. . . well, that would just exaggerate that idea a bit more. I'll see what I can do. . . ;D
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Post by The Drall on Nov 8, 2010 19:12:00 GMT -5
Who do I get to be, Zovo?
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Nov 8, 2010 19:19:53 GMT -5
Who do I get to be, Zovo? Drallion. Average soldier in the Sillian army. Know what happens to sociopaths in a military position who've spent all their time on hedonism as opposed to training? They get dead.
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