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Post by J.O.N ((Dragonwing)) on May 26, 2015 18:07:50 GMT -5
That sounds like an amazing idea, but that could be bias on my part.
I've always wondered how tie my actual field of study into a magic setting, but I always think of real boring ways. Like a conservator having to deal with enchantments changing the oxidisation rates of metal objects.
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Post by James on May 26, 2015 18:19:00 GMT -5
That sounds like an amazing idea, but that could be bias on my part. I've always wondered how tie my actual field of study into a magic setting, but I always think of real boring ways. Like a conservator having to deal with enchantments changing the oxidisation rates of metal objects. This is all a slow build on my Venice meets Fantasy meets Peaky Blinders idea. I also want a sentient disease because I've been toying with that idea for so long. I'm trying not to put too many things in at once, but it all fits at the moment. |
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Post by James on May 26, 2015 21:02:13 GMT -5
URGENT Did the bold letters catch your attention? Then it worked. I have a bit of a problem and I'd love it if anyone could take the time to try and help me out. If you're busy, though, ignore this. I stumbled across an anthology that was seeking comedy stories on the theme of "memory". Amazingly, I already had a story for that! awritersrecluse.proboards.com/thread/4712/3-bravo-james-bloodeyeFor some strange reason, the editors didn't want a full submission even if your story was finished. They just wanted a premise and a 500 word excerpt. I sent both in with an average level of expectation. I thought the premise was cool, and I love several of the jokes, but on the whole it's not my strongest story. Also, I found it incredibly hard to pick out a 500 word excerpt. So I just send in the first 480-odd words of the piece. They got back to me today saying they -were- going to reject me because the excerpt didn't make them go "wow". However, they liked the premise and the excerpt was actually well-written, it just didn't have any "drama or gusto". So they'd like me to send in another excerpt instead. But, I only have three days till the deadline closes! Which leads to my request: From the above story, what part do you think can work as a 500 words excerpt? Here's my thinking and dilemma. The story is actually quite layered. There's a double line of payoff. You get the payoff of the absurd comedy, but then you get a second payoff when the absurd comedy is then given a completely logical explanation. I think if I take 500 words of absurd comedy, the story isn't given the depth that it has. If I take the 500 words of explanation, then it's not given any "drama or gusto". So... Can you see a 500 word passage in that story which has the "wow factor". Alternatively, do you think it's worth writing 500 words extra for the story to submit? I wouldn't be doing it just for the sake of the excerpt; I think the whole supernatural thing in his garden is brushed over too quickly anyway, so I was going to come back to it. Do you think that could be a good 500 words bit to send if I can write it in the next three days? ^ Because I have no shame, putting it on the new page too. |
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Post by James on May 27, 2015 4:28:06 GMT -5
Alright, I've got an excerpt sorted and ready to send off to them. Big thanks to Zovo and Pete for both picking out something and for picking out the -same- thing.
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on May 27, 2015 20:40:38 GMT -5
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Post by The Counter Cultist(Sawyer) on May 27, 2015 20:48:23 GMT -5
So Ron is basically Kenny now?
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Post by Injin on May 27, 2015 20:53:18 GMT -5
So Ron is basically Kenny now? This feels fake. |
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Post by Matteo ((Taed)) on May 27, 2015 21:26:55 GMT -5
PSA: Clickhole is owned by The Onion.
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Post by The Counter Cultist(Sawyer) on May 27, 2015 21:34:54 GMT -5
PSA: Clickhole is owned by The Onion. Aaaand disappointment. Ron dying in myriad ways would've made me bite the bullet and sign up for pottermore |
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on May 27, 2015 21:42:25 GMT -5
PSA: Clickhole is owned by The Onion. Yeah, seemed awfully out of character, so I googled clickhole and realized it was fake. Decided to leave it anyway. Unrelated, I don't know what's worse, that Swype recognized "googled" as a legitimate verb, or that it wasn't a proper noun. Actually, that's a really strange grammatical issue... It's not a property noun, it'd be a proper verb... I don't think I've ever encountered that before. |
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Post by Croswynd on May 27, 2015 21:47:43 GMT -5
PSA: Clickhole is owned by The Onion. Yeah, seemed awfully out of character, so I googled clickhole and realized it was fake. Decided to leave it anyway. Unrelated, I don't know what's worse, that Swype recognized "googled" as a legitimate verb, or that it wasn't a proper noun. Actually, that's a really strange grammatical issue... It's not a property noun, it'd be a proper verb... I don't think I've ever encountered that before. I mean, there's always "Name'd/name'ing" it. Like, "You totally Geoff'd it." or "You're totally Geoff'ing it right now." That's sort of the same thing. Or is it just weird because it's recognized officially by Swype? |
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Post by James on May 27, 2015 21:50:22 GMT -5
PSA: Clickhole is owned by The Onion. Aaaand disappointment. Ron dying in myriad ways would've made me bite the bullet and sign up for pottermore Why the Ron hate? Ron's dumbing down in the movies really have changed the perception of the character. All his good parts were given to Hermione. |
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Post by The Counter Cultist(Sawyer) on May 27, 2015 22:32:40 GMT -5
Aaaand disappointment. Ron dying in myriad ways would've made me bite the bullet and sign up for pottermore Why the Ron hate? Ron's dumbing down in the movies really have changed the perception of the character. All his good parts were given to Hermione. It's half the fact that the movies are more in my head than the books. I haven't read them in a while and the movies are regular watching here at home. The other half is that I'm a dick who likes reading about gingers dying in amusing ways I'd actually love it if Rowling did this with any character, it seems like some fun could be had. |
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Post by Kaez on May 28, 2015 7:56:29 GMT -5
Aaaand disappointment. Ron dying in myriad ways would've made me bite the bullet and sign up for pottermore Why the Ron hate? Ron's dumbing down in the movies really have changed the perception of the character. All his good parts were given to Hermione. Which in turn made Hermione worse because her flaws disappeared. Although, being played by Emma Watson, flawlessness felt natural.... |
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Post by J.O.N ((Dragonwing)) on May 28, 2015 8:40:08 GMT -5
Why the Ron hate? Ron's dumbing down in the movies really have changed the perception of the character. All his good parts were given to Hermione. Which in turn made Hermione worse because her flaws disappeared. Although, being played by Emma Watson, flawlessness felt natural.... I can't imagine the internal strife going on inside James's head. On one hand he has to defend his red haired kin but in the other he must detract from the flawlessness of Emma Watson.  |
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