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Post by J.O.N ((Dragonwing)) on Nov 1, 2011 4:09:54 GMT -5
Thought I'll put up a thread where I can leave some snippets of what I've written. It was dark by the time the group reached the tiger kill, some of the porters held torches for the men to see. To the surprise of the guide and the Englishmen the tiger appeared to have made its way further in to the jungle then they had suspected. More concerning was the realisation that it had been dragged part of the way. Circling the kill George, James, Francis and Seymour stared down at the huge gash that raked the side of the large tiger. It’s once beautiful orange and black fur was marred by blood and its intestines and been ripped out and left piled beside it. The stench of its guts left the air putrid. |
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Post by J.O.N ((Dragonwing)) on Nov 1, 2011 4:46:52 GMT -5
Past 1,666 words. Feel goood.
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Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Nov 1, 2011 7:38:54 GMT -5
Past 1,666 words. Feel goood. Grats! >.> |
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Post by J.O.N ((Dragonwing)) on Nov 2, 2011 5:28:34 GMT -5
I find myself fairly bad at descriptions, I was wondering if this sufficed to convey the image of my Werewolf. By now, with it mere inches away from him, George could see the beast in its full form. Covered in black mangy hair, its appearance was like that of a wolf, but far more grotesque and revolting. Its head was scarred and large; though its muzzle was far shorter than a canine it still held the basic shape of one. The beast’s body was far more top heavy with a huge bulking chest and shoulders supporting almost ape like arms of tremendous size and muscle. They ended in huge human like hands except for the massive claws, gleaming as if sharp as iron blades. The beast’s hindquarters in comparison were almost amusingly small. Its legs were the same pawed feet and structure of a dog or wolf, but its knees were inverted and still the size of George’s arms. |
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Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Nov 2, 2011 11:48:36 GMT -5
I find myself fairly bad at descriptions, I was wondering if this sufficed to convey the image of my Werewolf. By now, with it mere inches away from him, George could see the beast in its full form. Covered in black mangy hair, its appearance was like that of a wolf, but far more grotesque and revolting. Its head was scarred and large; though its muzzle was far shorter than a canine it still held the basic shape of one. The beast’s body was far more top heavy with a huge bulking chest and shoulders supporting almost ape like arms of tremendous size and muscle. They ended in huge human like hands except for the massive claws, gleaming as if sharp as iron blades. The beast’s hindquarters in comparison were almost amusingly small. Its legs were the same pawed feet and structure of a dog or wolf, but its knees were inverted and still the size of George’s arms. With the creature "mere inches" away from the character, surely you can come up with more than just what it -looks- like. How does it smell? Perhaps he can hear a low growl in its throat? Is it touching him? How does it feel? |
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Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Nov 2, 2011 16:20:26 GMT -5
The key, Drag, is to use up most of your word-count with endlessly long descriptions  hehe |
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Post by J.O.N ((Dragonwing)) on Nov 2, 2011 18:20:33 GMT -5
I find myself fairly bad at descriptions, I was wondering if this sufficed to convey the image of my Werewolf. By now, with it mere inches away from him, George could see the beast in its full form. Covered in black mangy hair, its appearance was like that of a wolf, but far more grotesque and revolting. Its head was scarred and large; though its muzzle was far shorter than a canine it still held the basic shape of one. The beast’s body was far more top heavy with a huge bulking chest and shoulders supporting almost ape like arms of tremendous size and muscle. They ended in huge human like hands except for the massive claws, gleaming as if sharp as iron blades. The beast’s hindquarters in comparison were almost amusingly small. Its legs were the same pawed feet and structure of a dog or wolf, but its knees were inverted and still the size of George’s arms. With the creature "mere inches" away from the character, surely you can come up with more than just what it -looks- like. How does it smell? Perhaps he can hear a low growl in its throat? Is it touching him? How does it feel? See, this why I need you guys, it never occurred to me you have more than one sense. |
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