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Post by ARSmith ((Wolfeh)) on Mar 2, 2011 19:52:58 GMT -5
Vague here was good! Don't get me wrong <3 I like that you don't give the reader everything and kinda let them decide. A lot of flash fictions are set-up that way (and poems). Just think a spit-shine might help it a bit :] <3 (... That dream, thinking about it, sounds frickin' scary!) It was very scary. Very, very scary. Seeing I'm all childish-looking, it was very... Odd seeing myself stand there. The Sin, I'll tell you now, was a body. ._. Did I give you that vibe when I used 'Sin', instead? That was a huge goal, and I'll definitely give it a shining. :3 |
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Post by ARSmith ((Wolfeh)) on Mar 27, 2011 11:19:06 GMT -5
.: Alone :. I'm afraid to be left alone in a room with no windows, For I fear I nay never see the light of day, Where the sun touches the roof of my prison, And I can not feel it's warmth. The perpetuity of an idea runs in my head, Giving me thoughts of scarce release, To which I believe my soul will alas be relieved, Of a body that trembles beneath its own mind. I watch as the room remains as dark as it was before, And laugh idly as my heart drums, And remember the note on the knife in my hands, reading, "One stroke brings consolation, while a clean thrust brings eternal peace." |
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