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Nov 28, 2009 18:50:02 GMT -5
Post by The Timeless One on Nov 28, 2009 18:50:02 GMT -5
This is retarded. I warn you all now. It was done in about 1 minute, with barely any editing. I didn't follow any format whatsoever, just started writing my thoughts. I don't even know why I'm putting this up here...maybe I just want attention. Fuck if I know.
Silence, then a bang I can hear so much, so much whirling and noise and buzzing Thoughts fly by Too fast to count What happens next? Why did this happen? What do I do now? Quicker and quicker they flow Like a fast paced river Night, day Why him? Why she? Why not me? Have I done something wrong? Don’t I deserve this? Like a solid stone I stood by her And yet, I feel as rejected as a golden leaf In the fall time And why not that? Why not now? Why them? Why not me? In the end, All that occurs is a tired brain A weary body, And a heavy heart. Why not.
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Nov 28, 2009 20:11:55 GMT -5
Post by ARSmith ((Wolfeh)) on Nov 28, 2009 20:11:55 GMT -5
With editing and a period of revise, this could prove to be a very interesting poem. :] So, yep. I say edit and revise.
2/5
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Nov 28, 2009 21:35:44 GMT -5
Post by The Timeless One on Nov 28, 2009 21:35:44 GMT -5
I don't really feel like revising it, though.
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