Down the Rabbit Hole

[Sensar]

Oct 19, 2009 3:31:40 GMT -5 ASGetty ((Zovo)) said:

You know one of the things I like about your work here Sensar, is that it is invariably you.

For every forum poster here there is a little voice in my head which is just a touch different for all of them. Sometimes, when they write; when I read it that little voice changes and their Random Banter and their written work don't have the feeling that they are created by the same person. With you, it's different. Your poetry voice and your banter voice are identical; and I love reading your work.

FYI: minor spelling error, 7th line. "In" vs. "it."

((Thanks!))

[Sensar]

nine muses
singing their songs
i have one myself
she's a fickle one
a few notes tauntingly in the ear
before pulling away to let me flounder without tune
but when the song starts
it's a brilliant array of light
i just wish
my muse wasn't a fickle bitch.

[ASGetty ((Zovo))]

Was it intentional that it sounds as though your muse deserted you somewhere in the last three lines?

[Kaez]

Oct 21, 2009 19:48:44 GMT -5 ASGetty ((Zovo)) said:

Was it intentional that it sounds as though your muse deserted you somewhere in the last three lines?

I'm pretty sure it was. And I liked that a lot.

[ASGetty ((Zovo))]

I thought it might be; but I didn't wanna be like. . . "I liked the way the ending kinda sucked, good job."

And then have Sensar be all, "That wasn't on purpose /cry"


Note: Both lines of dialogue are exagerations, I'd never write that, nor would I expect Sensar to react in such a manner.

[Sensar]

((

Oct 21, 2009 20:08:19 GMT -5 ASGetty ((Zovo)) said:

"That wasn't on purpose /cry"

*sniffle*

I actually kind of like it, looking at it now.

I'm a museless genius!))

[ASGetty ((Zovo))]

Dammit.

[Sensar]

flicker

and the flickering lights
they dance over me
the rapid shuddering
shuttering
shivering
and i wonder why
and whether or not
i flicker

[Kaez]

As good as usual!!! ;D

[Jenny (Reffy)]

((Wow. How did I miss these? Sensar! Wow! ... Lost for words.

The water one did look like a tornado, and I liked that!
I loved flicker! LOVED IT! Not even sure why, but I did. The pace, the thought, the trailing off.
Nine muses also made me laugh. That little rhyming bit at the end really tied it off, in a deserted kind of way!

Cannot pick a favorite. Will be watching this thread - now I know it's here!))

[Sensar]

((Aw, shucks. Thank you, Reffy.))

[Sensar]

light

the myriad in one
and the sights that i may behold
through the ancient prism
of lights.
the utter lack is confusion
but the beam is pristine
from one to many
we do see light

[Sensar]

time

and by the drop
the sand trickles
through the echoes
of time.
but is it all just me
or the ever passing line
grain by grain
the invisible increment
the note
to which we all invariably step.

[Sensar]

soft yellow on green
pillows of grey sky with grass
a soft orb awaits

[Sensar]

resurrection
amazing
how one moment can spark
creation
or resurrection.
the moment in shimmering golden light
the smooth waves of sound,
remind one -
there is time,
there is poetry to be found.