Arlyan
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Post by Arlyan on Apr 16, 2009 19:09:27 GMT -5
((Here are a few poems I wrote during math class, let me know what you think of them))
1 Emotions inside show effects out. Anger, fury so hot, instead of heated words, fire, not just muscles clenching, flames flickering from fingertips, eyes, bright, burning, hot. So, too, passion, determination, concentration, focus. All fire, all intense, all dangerous, and all beautiful.
2 A blinding flash, but, when gone, still blind Too bright, too dark, the division sharp, painful, and awakening.walking in the light, for the few precious seconds, then plunged into dark, left wallowing, wondering if the few moments of light will ever come again. But it doesn’t And waiting And still, the world is dark And waiting And waiting.
3 Pure energy jagged, raw, pure burns the sky, lord over its realm majestic, beautiful, unstoppable and just as quickly, gone leaveing only its roar of anguish, but still, forever gone.
4 Flight All the rules were broken Man cant’ fly. It’s never been done Even blashphemy was cried. Then, Power, ingenuity, grace Because they didn’t listen
5 With life, then turns to death light to dark bright to dull never to glow again considering pain sorrow and troughs, is the balance in favor of existence or of never.
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Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Apr 20, 2009 18:53:45 GMT -5
I most liked number 5. The contrasts, the ending and the pace/spacing. Very dark. A lot of them very dark. I disliked number 1. This is just personal taste though. It was like a massive tumbling snowball of emotions not being funneled in to anything. Not sure if this was intended.
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Post by Arlyan on Apr 20, 2009 22:37:13 GMT -5
Thank you. Yeah, it was my intent for #1 to be jumbled and chaotic, I'm honestly not sure how much I like it myself, but I felt it deserved to be displayed. #5 is my personal favorite of the batch, I'm glad I'm not the only one who likes it
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Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Apr 21, 2009 10:34:02 GMT -5
Ahhh - well good news is I totally got the jumbled and chaotic feeling from #1 .. think I'm gonna go post one or two of my poems now got me thinking about them again (although mine are a lot lighter and silly)
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