Way Station Five ((Critiques Wanted!))

[James]

Aug 31, 2011 0:48:37 GMT -5 @theredbaron said:

And by backstory, I meant the paragraph about how humans hadn't seen any alien races, toward the beginning.

But that was a sentence in a paragraph describing the setting. That's what I meant. She mentions we haven't found aliens at the start of that paragraph and then goes on to describe the setting for remaining 75% of that paragraph.

[James]

Aug 31, 2011 0:49:58 GMT -5 Croswynd said:

Zovo seems to be the best at these types of reviews. He's been helpful to me in the past. I'd ask him to review, too, if he has time.

Like I mentioned to him in the Writers' Discussion Thread, I'm going to be bugging him soon. I'm already taking things on board from people's review and giving this a rewrite.