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Jenny (Reffy)
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AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 14:22:56 GMT -5

Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Jan 12, 2010 14:22:56 GMT -5

I'm getting worried again. Pushing the boundaries on the topic (not sexy this time - just not what people are expecting.) It is also proving a bitch to write because I don't want to keep repeating "you think / you do / you this / you that."

Let me just say that I hate second person perspective! It feels like I'm shoving feelings/thoughts on the reader rather than letting them explore the feelings/thoughts themselves. Bleh! Is it me or did we get the worse perspective?

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ASGetty ((Zovo)) Admin Morgan Freeman? COWARD! Posts: 24,012	AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 14:33:21 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Jan 12, 2010 14:33:21 GMT -5 Pushing the boundaries on the topic (not sexy this time Oh noes! Sexy distaster!
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AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 14:36:04 GMT -5

Post by Kaez on Jan 12, 2010 14:36:04 GMT -5

Jan 12, 2010 14:22:56 GMT -5 Jenny (Reffy) said:

I'm getting worried again. Pushing the boundaries on the topic (not sexy this time - just not what people are expecting.) It is also proving a bitch to write because I don't want to keep repeating "you think / you do / you this / you that."

Let me just say that I hate second person perspective! It feels like I'm shoving feelings/thoughts on the reader rather than letting them explore the feelings/thoughts themselves. Bleh! Is it me or did we get the worse perspective?

A)) I know it -seems- that way, but believe me, you use it just as much as you use "I" in first person. It's just a little less familiar to you this way. There are ways to change the sentence structure to make it feel less repetitive.

B)) Second person is definitely the least common, I sympathize.

Better luck next time; don't worry so much.

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AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 15:13:33 GMT -5

Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Jan 12, 2010 15:13:33 GMT -5

I've got the main story/plot hashed out. Now it's mostly editing left - although there is a lot of editing to be done. Think I broke second person AND tense in only 1,800 words! Going to need another writer to check it over this time, not just friends since they won't spot the tense-breaks.

When the idea came to me last night it truly did sound genius. Hubby said I should make it a novel! I probably won't. Not my cuppa tea.

Let me just ask this ... disaster doesn't have to be natural? It can be man-made? Wiki said yes, just wondering how others feel on this ...

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ASGetty ((Zovo)) Admin Morgan Freeman? COWARD! Posts: 24,012	AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 15:18:20 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Jan 12, 2010 15:18:20 GMT -5 Disaster is in the eye of the beholder.
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Jenny (Reffy) Senior Author Giggle Factory ... and who the hell knows where Agent Reffy is. Posts: 8,193	AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 15:23:02 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Jenny (Reffy) on Jan 12, 2010 15:23:02 GMT -5 Ew! There is a substitute for sour cream? Oh that is gross!
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ASGetty ((Zovo)) Admin Morgan Freeman? COWARD! Posts: 24,012	AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 15:24:00 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Jan 12, 2010 15:24:00 GMT -5 Tastes just like it. . .
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AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 15:26:36 GMT -5

Post by Matteo ((Taed)) on Jan 12, 2010 15:26:36 GMT -5

Jan 12, 2010 15:23:02 GMT -5 Jenny (Reffy) said:

Ew! There is a substitute for sour cream? Oh that is gross!

Is it really so much worse than thick, fatty cow excretions, swimming in bacteria after being left out in the sun too long?

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AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 15:30:20 GMT -5

Post by Kaez on Jan 12, 2010 15:30:20 GMT -5

Jan 12, 2010 15:26:36 GMT -5 Matteo ((Taed)) said:

Jan 12, 2010 15:23:02 GMT -5 Jenny (Reffy) said:

Ew! There is a substitute for sour cream? Oh that is gross!

Is it really so much worse than thick, fatty cow excretions, swimming in bacteria after being left out in the sun too long?

... Let's rephrase that as "Delicious, sun-baked, cream product made from an age-old culturing process."

Better luck next time; don't worry so much.

Matteo ((Taed)) Admin Mostly Harmless Oh, I say! Posts: 23,339	AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 15:42:53 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Matteo ((Taed)) on Jan 12, 2010 15:42:53 GMT -5 How about, the milk in the bottom of the cereal bowl that nobody bothered to empty since it was put on the counter .... a week ago?
	"He floated like a butterfly, and stung like a bee. I float like an eagle, and sting like an eagle with a scorpion in its mouth." -Stephen Colbert "My doctor says that I have a malformed public-duty gland and a natural deficiency in moral fibre, and that I am therefore excused from saving Universes." -Ford Prefect "That which holds the image of Graham Norton becomes itself Graham Norton."

ASGetty ((Zovo)) Admin Morgan Freeman? COWARD! Posts: 24,012	AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 15:46:00 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ASGetty ((Zovo)) on Jan 12, 2010 15:46:00 GMT -5 Jan 12, 2010 15:42:53 GMT -5 Matteo ((Taed)) said: How about, the milk in the bottom of the cereal bowl that nobody bothered to empty since it was put on the counter .... a week ago? Savages. Do the damned dishes.
	Last Edit: Jan 12, 2010 15:46:20 GMT -5 by ASGetty ((Zovo)) Fozzy: You ever been shot with a tranquilizer dart... Kermit? Kermit: No. But I licked my third cousin once and the walls started melting; so I feel your pain.

Matteo ((Taed)) Admin Mostly Harmless Oh, I say! Posts: 23,339	AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 15:46:59 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Matteo ((Taed)) on Jan 12, 2010 15:46:59 GMT -5 I didn't say this happened in -my- house.
	"He floated like a butterfly, and stung like a bee. I float like an eagle, and sting like an eagle with a scorpion in its mouth." -Stephen Colbert "My doctor says that I have a malformed public-duty gland and a natural deficiency in moral fibre, and that I am therefore excused from saving Universes." -Ford Prefect "That which holds the image of Graham Norton becomes itself Graham Norton."

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AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 17:54:56 GMT -5

Post by Bloodeye the Bai Ze on Jan 12, 2010 17:54:56 GMT -5

Jan 12, 2010 15:46:00 GMT -5 ASGetty ((Zovo)) said:

Jan 12, 2010 15:42:53 GMT -5 Matteo ((Taed)) said:

How about, the milk in the bottom of the cereal bowl that nobody bothered to empty since it was put on the counter .... a week ago?

Savages.
Do the damned dishes.

Dishes? What are... dishes?

*looks over at kitchen table that is strewn with various chunks of raw meat and blood.*

I just use my hands.

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The Drall Junior Author Legal Property of AWR Nothing is true. Everything is permitted. Posts: 3,796	AWR Cup Discussion Thread Jan 12, 2010 21:38:41 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by The Drall on Jan 12, 2010 21:38:41 GMT -5 So, my original plan is now all twisted around... But I like it a lot more. So, I need to get at least a 45 to have even a slight chance... Let's get to work.
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