ADULT CONTENT! (Birthday Party)

[Sekot]

There must be something wrong with me because it didn't affect me in the slightest.... >.>

[Mena]

Feb 3, 2009 20:23:30 GMT -5 Jordy said:

It was good. I will say, though, that, while it's a common and fitting thing in erotic stories, the vulgar seemed a bit... Overused. You didn't really type the actual names of sexual orifices and the whatnot, like "penis" or "vagina".

Other than that, well done.

I know and I don't say 'penis and vagina' in real life either. My husband would laugh if I did because that's just not who I am. I don't sugar coat unless I am just messing around and having fun. Or poking fun at others.

Dyl, nope, not a professional. Not even close, but thanks.

Ali, I am sorry to say that this piece was written well before AWR.


Sekot, no, there is nothing wrong with you.

Blu, I am glad you enjoyed the read.


Thanks to all for their comments.

[Gor]

interesting

[o ding]

A few things killed this for me.
First of all: I'm not a fan of lesbian stuff. Obviously.
Second: The formatting. Oh my god, that killed my eyes. I'm sure you didn't purposely put it out like that, but...aagghh.